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I'm doing a bit of a push edit on Con Shirt at the same time as I'm trying to take my time so that I don't miss much. Most days I'm comfortable with my work, but this time I'm left a little unsure about a decision I made.
I have one rather intense scene that starts out almost too perfect, goes through the MC recognizing that fact along with her mom's almost frantic energy and ends in a big reveal that shakes her world. The whole thing is almost 3k and a little bit much.
In my first draft, I cut the scene in the middle, at the transition point when things go weird. This leaves me with an actual cliffhanger chapter. I don't usually go for them...I think it's silly to break on the cliffhanger, have the reader turn the page, and start up the next moment. However, in this case giving the reader a moment to live in Rochelle's embarrassment, to linger in the moment when she's going to have to come across as a complete kook to the people who brought her into this world, seems a good moment. This is especially important since the second half of the scene, now in a new chapter, takes her so far from that moment as to realize not only will her parents not think she's a kook, or at least her mom, but that her parents have been lying to her from the start, that maybe none of this would have happened if they'd just told her the truth. It shatters her perceptions of everything that had provided grounding in her life up to this point.
Am I comfortable with the call? Obviously not or I wouldn't be mentioning it. Have I considered just leaving them all together as one chapter? Sure. Do I think that would be the best choice? Nope. So I'm left with lingering doubts until someone else reads the book, but when is that ever new.
My stance on this book is much like my stance on many of mine: either it works and is wonderful, or it's so broken that I just can't see it and will never be worth the time I put into it. In other words, I have no idea :).
So, any thoughts to share on this chapter split idea? I know it's hard to tell sight unseen, but...
And stats:
Edited Today: 5,682 words
28 Chapters complete - 71% of the novel
9 Chapters remain
22,019 Remaining word count
53,918 Current Total
77,401 Predicted Total
I have one rather intense scene that starts out almost too perfect, goes through the MC recognizing that fact along with her mom's almost frantic energy and ends in a big reveal that shakes her world. The whole thing is almost 3k and a little bit much.
In my first draft, I cut the scene in the middle, at the transition point when things go weird. This leaves me with an actual cliffhanger chapter. I don't usually go for them...I think it's silly to break on the cliffhanger, have the reader turn the page, and start up the next moment. However, in this case giving the reader a moment to live in Rochelle's embarrassment, to linger in the moment when she's going to have to come across as a complete kook to the people who brought her into this world, seems a good moment. This is especially important since the second half of the scene, now in a new chapter, takes her so far from that moment as to realize not only will her parents not think she's a kook, or at least her mom, but that her parents have been lying to her from the start, that maybe none of this would have happened if they'd just told her the truth. It shatters her perceptions of everything that had provided grounding in her life up to this point.
Am I comfortable with the call? Obviously not or I wouldn't be mentioning it. Have I considered just leaving them all together as one chapter? Sure. Do I think that would be the best choice? Nope. So I'm left with lingering doubts until someone else reads the book, but when is that ever new.
My stance on this book is much like my stance on many of mine: either it works and is wonderful, or it's so broken that I just can't see it and will never be worth the time I put into it. In other words, I have no idea :).
So, any thoughts to share on this chapter split idea? I know it's hard to tell sight unseen, but...
And stats:
Edited Today: 5,682 words
28 Chapters complete - 71% of the novel
9 Chapters remain
22,019 Remaining word count
53,918 Current Total
77,401 Predicted Total
